Critical Investigation: learner response

WWW: Fairly fluently written with a strong sense of your own opinion and citied autonomy. Good coverage of Hollywood/institution with some statistics - but could include more and discuss the Oscars from last year.

EBI: Too descriptive - you're just re-relling the story a lot of the time. You need to include textual analysis (of media language) all the way through - how the representation are constructed.

More needed on the debates about appropriation, along with the more thoeyr generally - include Alvarado + Fanon + the stuff you've been doing with Mr Halsey on post-colonialism.

Provide more of a historical context of slavery and compare it to now.

Don't use 'I' in an essay.

Weak bibilography from too few book references and wrongly presented - You must address this.

Second draft target: A

SHOTLIST

SHOT#	LOCATION	SHOT TYPE	CAMERA ANGLE	CAMERA MOVEMENT	SHOT DESCRIPTION
#1	INT.	CU	Eye\head level	Still	START - Shirtless subject waking up and getting out of bed. Bright natural light.
#2	INT.	MS	Low	Pan	Subject’s feet hitting the floor, doesn’t stand up
#3	INT.	POV	High-angle	Still	Subject looking at text messages on his phone; still sat on bed
#4	INT.	CU	Low-angle	Still	Subject smiling at text messages and gets up from bed
#5	INT.	MS	Low	Tracking	We follow subject as he goes to the bathroom. Brassiere (prop) on the floor.
#6	INT.	MS	High	Still	Steam through window in shower, we can still see figure through
#7	INT.	MS	Low	Tracking	Follow subject out of shower to wardrobe.
#8	INT.	CU	High	Still	Camera from inside wardrobe looking out to the subject
#9	INT.	ES	Low	Pan	We see the whole room for the first time as he walks from one side to the other.
#10	INT.	MS	High-angle	Tracking	Subject putting on cufflinks, we see scars on his palm.
#11	EXT.	LS	Head level	Still	Flashback – Subject getting stabbed in his hand and he’s involved in an altercation.
#12	INT.	MS	Low-angle	Tilt	Subject shaking off the memory and chucking a little. Not fond.
#13	INT.	ECU	Level	Still	Close up on watch as he picks it up from the table, blurry background.
#14	INT.	MS	Low	Still	Subject putting on socks and shoes, we see scar on his ankle.
#15	EXT.	LS	High	Tracking	Flashback – subject being chased and falls on barbered wire and suffers.
#16	INT.	CU	Low	Still	Subject touches it lightly, hand goes over it.
#17	INT.	MS	Level	Pan	Subject shrugging the memory off.
#18	INT.	ES	Low	Still	Subject getting ready to leave, grabs his car keys and wallet.
#19	INT.	MS	High	Pan	As he exits, he looks back at the room to make sure he didn’t forget anything and then walks out.
#20	INT.	LS	Low	Still	Subject gets into elevator, presses button and waits, next shot when doors close.
#21	INT.	MS	Low	Still	Shot of subject tapping his shoes on the floor, emphasis on nervous.
#22	INT.	CU	High	Still	The elevator floor numbers as they go down.
#23	INT.	MS	Level	Tracking	Follow subject out of elevator into the lobby.
#24	INT.	CU	High	Pan	Subject walks towards camera but out of the main doors.
#25	EXT.	MS	Low	Still	Subject exists the building and walks to his left.
#26	EXT.	LS	High	Tracking	We follow the subject as he walks through a posh area, dressed in suit.
#27	EXT.	MS	High	Pan	Waist up shot of him walking towards camera
#28	EXT.	ES	Low	Still	Supercar to the side, subject walks towards it and unlocks it.
#29	EXT.	MS	High	Pan	Subject gets into car, camera still outside.
#30	EXT.	CU	Low	Still	Back of car, drives off. The camera blurs as the car gets further away.
#31	EXT.	ES	High	Pan	We arrive at another building where subject works
#32	INT.	MS	Low	Pan	He walks in cheerfully and in a good mood.
#33	INT.	CU	High	Still	As he sits down, he checks his phone as message pops up (we hear sound)
#34	INT.	CU	Low	Still	Close up of phone previewing the message.
#35	INT.	CU	Low	Pan	Close up of his face looking confused.
#36	INT.	MS	Level	Tracking	Rushing out of his office to go outside
#37	INT.	CU	Level	Still	Repeatedly pressing lift to go down
#38	EXT.	MS	High	Tilt	Leaves building and to an ally way
#39	EXT.	MS	Low	Pan	Dials phone number that texted him
#40	EXT.	CU	High	Still	Looking left and right to check no one followed
#41	EXT.	MS	Low	Pan	Phone picks up, he communicates and looks angry
#42	EXT.	CU	Low	Still	A second of him looking blank, shocked.
#43	EXT.	ES	High	Tilt	Looks right
#44	EXT.	MS	Level	Tilt	Roadman punches him - END