WWW: Fairly fluently written with a strong sense of your own opinion and citied autonomy. Good coverage of Hollywood/institution with some statistics - but could include more and discuss the Oscars from last year.
EBI: Too descriptive - you're just re-relling the story a lot of the time. You need to include textual analysis (of media language) all the way through - how the representation are constructed.
More needed on the debates about appropriation, along with the more thoeyr generally - include Alvarado + Fanon + the stuff you've been doing with Mr Halsey on post-colonialism.
Provide more of a historical context of slavery and compare it to now.
Don't use 'I' in an essay.
Weak bibilography from too few book references and wrongly presented - You must address this.
Second draft target: A
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